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Originally Posted by Coup
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Coup! You are alive! Thought you'd been abducted and murderaped by some jehovrastas! Nice to see you around... Join the topicals, a couple weeks left...
Sym, your style is so odd I'm having a hard time liking it, but, I do, its growing on me slowly
I couldn't tell if this was a dad talking to his son in a drug coma or the dad's thoughts of his dead unborn son and wouldabeen baby momma as he himself was going under...until the call 911 part, and thinking so up to there was sorta offputting with the sexual stuff, sorta creepy weird rather than emotional...
But, as I understand, you intended the parenthesized parts as what he was hearing from someone finding him dying
The concept became really good once I think I understood it, but it was lacking in some vagueries, not explaining who found him, or who killed the babymom (in thinking her dad, which would assume she lost the cointoss to tell him)
It was interesting but too much was left unsaid for something so conceptually deep like this, good shit though, keep at it