Damn man, this was spectacular... To be honest, I was just getting bored when Mark was at the door, thought it was going a typical PTSD guy kills himself in front if family approach was wondering why you mentioned Davis..., and you pulled the twist of the robbery, I was like, alright, intrigue piqued...and then right as my interest was dwindling with that, bam... Mom flips her shit and started whoopin ass, intrigue peaked... Climactic fight scene extraordinaire... And another twist with her being FBI... Dude, this was like so imagery filled I was literally watching the movie in my head. You set it up all so perfectly, I am seriously, seriously impressed with the first through read...
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"So now what?" Says a voice behind her as a CLICK reminds her, she missed one.
"You die..." She spins, dips, flips the firearm hand up, knuckles his throat,
*****then kicks his dick with a higher level of aggression than an offended horse hitting its rider.
While he moans, she grabs his wrist, grips it like pliers,
and whips it back in the direction from which it'd be fired.*****
He's shocked. "My aim is way tighter!!!" She makes him pull the trigger....
KOOOWWWWWW! his scatter brained appearance proves he's permenantly retired.
Straight up, I think this should be a HOF nomination
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