[veritas]

first of all, this belongs in open mic, and no one gets to post opens in discussion unless their name is Tonio aka Lil Crip.

second of all, the titel bothers me...psycho you mean? and even if so, what are you trying to prove? that you are psychotic? do you even understand what that means? and if so, why would you glorify it bruh bruh?



People don't like me anyways ,
Man I'm in a daze

this would have sounded better, "man I'm off in a daze" why are you off in a daze? how do you people don't like you ?

haven't picked up the bible in I don't know how long ,
I guess my soul is fading away
What would Christ say?

the first line is out of place, and once again I cannot tell if you are saying this sorrowfully, or just saying it and will contradict the supposed sorrow of this later on with some nonsense.....we shall see?


To the life I'm living , I'm just partying and dreaming it away.
beggin different women to give me a place to stay
trynna maintain the urge to not give up and let my dream fade away.

ok first off all this is mad basic girl. I mean bro. This is like something a child would right, no hate, but it sucks. Also, you just contradicted yourself...so you wonder if Christ would have a problem with you dreaming your life away, and now you are saying you should figth to keep the urge!? are you beginning to undertand what I am saying about how you have some growing up to do ?


lifes got me feelin dry when it rains
WE are NOT THE SAME

I am sure you thought the first part was wittier than how it was, I would have said, "praying for a drought, to let the locust reign" think about it.

I'm not a human , I'm a failed attempt of an ABORTION
born in a field of soaking corpes , Lit with some torches
thats mentals were twisted with some illuminati endorsements.

dude...a failed abortion is still an alive human smh. ok so you are for or against the illuminati, or are you debating it? and no you were not born in a field of soaking corpes torches, fire.....ok guy?

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This is how I was raised
I don't give a fuck
Play your chips right punk
" oh you crapped out "
pshh yeah.. Your outta luck.

(what does this have to do with being a psycho, or the first part? )


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Only Mis-Takes but never mistakes were used in an uncontrollable phase that was led on , Only by what haters were saying.

(this sounds terrible)

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A year later ima have y'all talking like " How amazing "

not unless everything about you changes in the written word bruh. no hate.

I gave it time
I spit my rhymes
and things started changin
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I'm the strangest of all gods creations
not a saying or free mason could change this record I'm lacin

this is nonsensical and is literally idiotic. remove this, or change the wording to where 1. this makes sense, and 2. has relevence to whatever it is you are trying to say here.

Who's your favorite rapper because I'm physco enough to tie him and shoot him up after sticking dynamite in the holes that were left from me knifin em up.

Oh, ok...back to the nonsensical violence and how you are crazy because of it...i guess this is the point right?

Who tha fuck is trying to fuck with this , that is Lucrative
" Your favorite rapper is wack "
and I can prove the shit.

so it is profitable for you to be fucked....pause. tickle me elmo.



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My world bi-otch ,
Im a commune to this
so quick , when you look back you wont know who it is.

how is one person going to commune? you are going to commune with what? you dont even make sense....that last line was like trying really hard to smash a chick then getting in bed finally and you can't get a boner.




so you still have some growing up to do. Because your wording sucks, your rhyming sucks, you are unable to form coherent strings of concepts, you need to grow up and figure out who you are so that you can make a message...right now you sound like everyother 14 year old with an autotune dipped in cat dook, I will personally never read another piece of work by you until you can prove to this world that you have elevated intellectually enough to matter, and subsequently have a message. read the vets of open mic, their words will teach you, remain humble. no hate.