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e11even · 11-04-2013, 03:32 AM

The most epic battle this week. Period.

YDK- You nailed a beautiful piece about a decision too many people have the wrong answer to. I loved the story and the execution, albeit spelling out a naivete narration in the vein of lesson teaching and fairytales. This sounds like a autobiographical scene, therefore very relatable. I liked this a lot. You didn't miss a beat. Good Job.

Frank- I wanna be like you when I grow up. Lyrically.
This was a massive undertaking, as you made each element stand out separately, and finally merged them for a grand finale of tragically epic and epically tragic proportions. I was confused at first, looking for the linear progression, but when I saw the final blow, I immediatelky felt that satisfaction of closure. That ending though. I was hoping for some sort of upbeat swansong before the tragic event. Maybe you shortened it? I was hoping he'd been the one to shoot some one else as some kind of ouburst and cry for attention. Great verse though, all in all. And how ambitious of you. You million line-writing bastard. I wish I was allowed to indulge (legally) this week. I guess I'll live vicariously through you this time. Good Shit.

MVGT Frank. Clearly more epic, though both brought that real shit, fa real fa real. Please show up next week guys.

11-04-2013, 03:32 AM	#12
e11even V.V Join Date: Sep 2013 Location: . Posts: 2,076 Battle Record: 31-20 Rep Power: 6247259	The most epic battle this week. Period. YDK- You nailed a beautiful piece about a decision too many people have the wrong answer to. I loved the story and the execution, albeit spelling out a naivete narration in the vein of lesson teaching and fairytales. This sounds like a autobiographical scene, therefore very relatable. I liked this a lot. You didn't miss a beat. Good Job. Frank- I wanna be like you when I grow up. Lyrically. This was a massive undertaking, as you made each element stand out separately, and finally merged them for a grand finale of tragically epic and epically tragic proportions. I was confused at first, looking for the linear progression, but when I saw the final blow, I immediatelky felt that satisfaction of closure. That ending though. I was hoping for some sort of upbeat swansong before the tragic event. Maybe you shortened it? I was hoping he'd been the one to shoot some one else as some kind of ouburst and cry for attention. Great verse though, all in all. And how ambitious of you. You million line-writing bastard. I wish I was allowed to indulge (legally) this week. I guess I'll live vicariously through you this time. Good Shit. MVGT Frank. Clearly more epic, though both brought that real shit, fa real fa real. Please show up next week guys. __________________ Ahem.