Breathless- This was well written, good cadence and flow. I wasn't exactly sure the subject you were aiming for, other than being a failure at (life?) something, but the body of work produced was pretty good.
Mike- This seemed similar to the Breathless approach, but more toward relationships. This felt more literal. Some metaphors felt sloppy, but overall an ok read.
MVGT Breathless for an overall better written piece. I didn't entirely like the angles, but it was an interesting read nonetheless. [i'm pressed for time]
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