11-04-2013, 01:30 AM
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Zygote.
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CYNICAL MEDITATION: CALM INDIFFERENCE AND SELFISH PACIFISM.
^your use of titles is always so abstract that it tricks the average reader into delving deeper than maybe they should.
Calm down. Relax. Turn that meta-view into a better view.
Try something different. Something that you’d never do.
Don’t plan ahead. No mission objectives.
Self-reflect. Then reflect again from a different perspective.
Hold things at an arm’s length and your arms will grow tired.
Hold it close instead. Drop those you no longer require.
No longer desired. Act for yourself. Disregard others.
^I like the repetition of no longer. This technique really creates instant emotion for me.
Fuck these motherfuckers. Let them all suffer.
^lol. line out of genocide/blacks book. Interestingly enough, it's the first time I've read a curse in one of your raps/write ups.
Selfishness and indifference is essential for self-fulfillment.
Just kill yourself. It helps to be persistent.
Become non-existent. Or don’t. Decide by yourself.
Be calm, relaxed and selfish. It’s good for your health.
^Pretty simple scheme wise - but flow wise still seems effective.
Become one with indifference, the feeling is comforting,
Because if the heart desires nothing you cannot experience suffering.
The more people care about something the more likely they’ll be to do something evil,
Benign indifference is peaceful -
And that is exactly why I hate happy people.
^doesn't seem like a justifiable reason
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diode.
Quote:
a little too young and a little too late
i just met a gentleman
he's heaven sent, it's settled then
limousines, the high life
and lots of medicine
rhythm and blues are just his type of hue
a suave seductive number
and he never leaves a bruise
dear mama, i love him
i don't think i'm coming back
after all, you know what they say about
.. "going black" ..
a voice infused by angels
my heart's condition strangled
every drop of my affection
inside his body, forever tangled
but things are different now
requests, indifferent how
a golden sunshower can deflower
and shatter every vow
they say he took advantage
this pain? i'll never manage
a sweet teen with sweet dreams
devoured and invalid
to understand his motives?
i'll try, though they're illegal
and that is exactly why
i hate "happy people"
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this was a incredibly short verse but it had somewhat summary style to it. Beginning/ middle/ end. Listen man I'm up on R Kelly and shit but not really to that extent, so in that regard it was a reach for me -
I voted for ZYG
Weird verses all around.
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