ya very cool battle guys
Certain - thought I was reading a run of the mill party girl verse. from the perspective of her boyfriend. man I was bored. the twist then took all that and flipped it. it was actually a verse about a cross dresser. and he , like many cross dressers , see the person they dress up as , as a whole different person. this was really well done. it threw me for a loop. the second read through showed some hints at the twist that were embedded in there. like the six foot 2 with heels line. the rhyming was good. the mutlis were good. but some seem forced a bit. the inners made the verse shine though. good shit.
Vulgar - sick verse. even though this is the Vulgar style I like the least. the verse was wordy. its just well very wordy is the only way I could describe it. the length of the lines are too long for my liking. it feels like a chore to get through each line. you do somehow make all that flow though. which is part of your genius. the story was cool. a mother telling her gun obsessed son that he needs to stop stockpiling weapons. then gets killed on the front lawn as she tries to leave. good story. it did get redundant though. I was like the guy likes weapons, that makes her mad. we get it. but it kept going down that path for what felt like forever. don't get me wrong it was very very well written and it was an impressive verse in a lot of ways. just not the style I enjoy.
vote - Certain
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