ZYG:
cracked up at your title.
favourite lines:
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Calm down. Relax. Turn that meta-view into a better view.
Try something different. Something that you’d never do.
Hold things at an arm’s length and your arms will grow tired.
Hold it close instead. Drop those you no longer require.
Become non-existent. Or don’t. Decide by yourself.
Be calm, relaxed and selfish. It’s good for your health.
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I wanted you to emphasis rhymes! "beta" instead of "better", "neva" instead of "never".
Really good lines though, I didn't feel the topical aspect as much as I felt this was just some straight solid advice, but decent flow.
Storyline non-existant.
Diode:
died.
I just don't even. lol.
Quote:
but things are different now
requests, indifferent how
a golden sunshower can deflower
and shatter every vow
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I figured it out here.
vote: diode, stronger words were writ by ZYG but it was a weak overall piece, diode provided amusement