[Mike Wrecka]

dope battle imo. two very different verses.

zygote - you potrayed someone that would hate happy people. an indifferent person that seems emotionless. he is dulled by the world around him and could care less about anything. to pull this off you, very cleverly wrote in the character of someone with a flat affect. unfortunately, this made the verse rather robotic and a tad boring. you hit the nail on the head but im the entertainment value was low. the rhyming and word choice were top notch. as usual for you. the flow, cadence and structure was pleasant to read. good work.

diode - welcome to the AOWL my friend. I was surprised here. very good verse. your take on the topic was creative and very entertaining. see you took the idea of happy people the song and then portrayed one of R.Kellys underage victims. using the first part as a letter to mom explaining how great the guy is worked very well. I could imagine these things usually go down like that. then having her explain his sick wants and needs in the second part brought it home. you had some emotion in there. and I would think that the girl that got pissed on irl , really does hate any r Kelly song. so ya good work here bro. mechanically, your structure is good man. its the format that doesn't work imo. your lines were complex but you split them in two making it look simple as fuck. but it read smooth so I could look past that. seriously re consider where you make your line breaks.

your way -

a voice infused by angels
my heart's condition strangled
every drop of my affection
inside his body, forever tangled

possibly a better way

a voice infused by angels, my heart's condition strangled
every drop of my affection,inside his body, forever tangled


but hey everyone has their own style so do you. just trying to be constructive a bit. but this worked here so swag it out how you want


good battle guys. two good reads but I enjoyed one more than the other so my vote goes to


vote - Diode