Mustered the door open, felt nothin but dreary wind If I knocked on it now would my past hear me then?
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Man i really dug that line. This was a very neat and orderly drop. It was relatively brief, easy to follow, and a great read. There was some hiccups here and there with the flow, but that's about it. There was moments of deeper introspection that i wish you sticked with, but this was still good regardless. Way to stick to a concept and keep elements of decent structure and wordplay in tact.
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