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Old 10-31-2013, 11:18 PM   #5
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Short vote but I read both so I drop thoughts.. first Diode. First real verse aside in a decade bro, congrats.. I liked it. Although the schemes seem simple, they did good instead of harm because it didn't drag on or rhyme for rhymes sake. Instead it had relative deent cadance and a bit of message barried beneath the fun.. I remember the incident so, I think you really did hit the topic with precision because the ending was, well, happy or had hilarity to it.. you took that route instead of going straight depressing from the point of view from the girl and being sedducedd and shit. I like the fun you had.

Ziggie- both conceptually and execution wise thumbs up. Although I don't really agree with the stance you took, its a different point of view I would have thoughtt of so that's cool. It was short and to the point, which is awsome because this verse had the ability to ompletely lull me to sleep if you kept going.


So I'm sure ill be the odd duckk, but actually have diode here. There's not enough humor in these leagues and baby D did it well, yet still maintained flow and didnnt come off corny at all. Both had different approaches then I've seen most of this season, but I got diode with just enough tickling of my preference to dethrone a champ
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