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Old 10-29-2013, 07:53 PM   #7
Vulgar
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lol this was quite entertaining. I didn't think you would keep my attention the whole way through but you did. Very creative concept and smooth execution. You were almost non-chalant with the way you told the story, rarely (if ever) faltering. When I saw 'meat, meets machine' I almost laughed out loud. Cyborgs for the win.

"I compose 20 luminous bars to entrap humanity in a large prison
feeble key-styles can't decipher you back to the star systems
harvesting harder wisdom, darker visions through unholy communions
screw your crew then, a union of humans is simply a fusion of mutants
consumed by toxic fumes, fuck these imprudent pollutants
doomed from womb to tomb
enslaved from cradle to grave
grave danger as I spit lethal infrared phrases
erasing any trace of the crazed and deranged"

^This was like listening to Canibus while drinking vanilla Pepsi. Fresh.

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