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Old 10-29-2013, 12:42 PM   #2
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I know I'm a little late on the feed but here it is. This piece by the looks of it was pretty simple, and when I started it I honestly didn't think I would like it. The lick her tits line especially stuck out to me and I started saying to myself, "I will not like this.", but it got better. The pace picked up from that line I just said and it was actually pretty good. Story about a man who killed himself from a pill overdose I'm guessing? I may be wrong but that's what it seemed like to me. All in all this was a good drop. I think if you spent more time developing your pieces it could be very good. Keep dropping my friend.
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