[Adonis]

Vulgar - "Some evenings he'd pray for an eventual wife and a Harley
Driving down a country road, cigar in mouth, a tyke in the car seat"

Visual killed me bro. hilarious imagery there. So...Superb writing as always as far as mechanics and flow go. however, I'm missing out on something because I don't see a link to the topic. After my vote maybe you can PM me and explain, because I don't know what it is. As far as I can see, the guy is an attorney or judge, and he kills this girl in the end because he seemed like a psycho to me. Still no connection to topic other than money which you mentioned twice I believe. Like the "raining gusts", some other nice imagery sprinkled about. All in all, solid read other than the issue I emntioned.

lex - ASSHOLE!!!! highest potential bro, WTF? You killed it. I have no idea where you would have gone with this, but I'm sure it would have been stellar. I enjoy your writing style. Crisp flow, but not over powering. Subtle imagery, but not blanketing.


V/Vulgar

Although if there were a simple 3 bar finisher I Lexicon had my vote. His verse was just more enjoyable up until that fuck of a ending.