Ydk great stuff great wording great progession through out the entire
Piece. Dope flow and imagery. .looks like you really fleshed this one out.
Seems wepl put and thought out....diggin the story alot.
Zen.
Seems like you rushed this..and with your style when its on its fucking dope
But when you rush you get this...its almost on the brink of genius.
But it falls a bit short. Or it could be taking a chance biting you in the ass.
Vote. Ydk for a more detailex and developed tale.
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