From what I read thus far this week, this match up seemed a bit weak conceptually, but even so, this is an either way selection. Adonis, imagery was okay, loved some of your descriptions which I felt were your strong point, but as Zen pointed out earlier, some of your lines seemed out of place. So it definitely messed up the flow, but not too much in my opinion. You told an end of the world type of story, and I felt you could have came up with a better way to tell the story, maybe stronger imagery, because it lacks a bit of flavor. Mike Wrecka, I feel your piece is pretty much around the same level as Adonis. Conceptually it could have been better and Pancake mentioned some solid points. Your ending doesn't tie in much with the story you told so I feel you missed out on having a solid concept and story overall. Story wise you I would say were slightly better than Adonis, but you weren't as descriptive or had any really strong imagery. I just liked your approach story wise better than Adonis. This could go either way really, I have to practically look at all aspects because you both are pretty close here, but one does stand out slightly. Although I feel Mike's approach was better, I felt his story wasn't well rounded, and the ending, as interesting as it was, doesn't feel complete. Adonis' approach wasn't very impressive, but I feel his imagery/descriptions give him the edge and he managed to put together a more complete piece by a bit.
MVGT: Adonis.
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