View Single Post
Old 10-27-2013, 09:45 AM   #6
zygote
Senior Member
 
Join Date: Jan 2013
Posts: 501
Battle Record: 33-12

Accomplishments
- OM HOF (2x)

Champed
- Art of Writing League (3x)

Rep Power: 737828
zygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant futurezygote has a brilliant future
Default

The first half was like a purposeful attempt at just focusing on describing the events and the emotions, this part was nice but the second half kind of beginning roughly at "symmetrical, serum ventricle, dimensional curves" was more of the bio-psychologist lingo in rhyme format that is extremely enjoyable and entertaining. E.g., " left-brain neural energy surge. electrical chains" the chains wordplay was a great subtle one. Also, the "Seminole genocide - slaughtered in the name of theoretical gains" was a good one liner shot too, that seems like a good topic to flesh out further actually. Overall, it's always good fun to read it, enjoy how you approach the different themes and topics discreetly with all the interesting one-liners and short turn of phrase.
zygote is offline   Reply With Quote