Mr. J I like the way you write. It's like if Karaoke wrote topicals. The wording is patiently done, you never rush through saying something and you express the 'meat' of the verse in an entertaining way. It's just a grimy, journalistic style that I enjoy reading. This part really caught my eye: "Predators I created, in my own influence" Good work.
Certain Haha the ending was classy. The only flaws I found in the verse was the use of slang vs. words like 'desolate' and 'pestilent' for obvious reasons. I know you wanted to flow well, but that was the only noticeable thing. Overall this was a cool approach to the topic, if a bit expected. Props on the ending flip.
My vote goes to Mr. J
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