I agree with ZYG (whose name was better as zygote). Expand and dilate. When flow is such an important part of a verse, giving us such a short snippet barely allows us to pick it up before it's over. I liked that this was about us. A few of the rhymes were clunkier than normal, but you're good at this style.
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