Welcome back to both of you.
Geno- This verse was a little underwhelming to me after reading what you wrote for our collab. Nothing about this verse was bad, but none of the lines stood out to me as worth remembering tbh. The strongest point of this drop was the flow which is usually the strongest point for you. If I had to guess, I'd say you were rushed because if you had more time I know you could have developed a more rounded out and compelling story.
Split- Great verse. The amount of detail you applied to each line of this verse was extremely impressive. You painted the picture perfectly and transported the reader there and that's the mark of a great writer. Also the word usage was outstanding. In fact there were more than a few of these words that I have no idea what they meant, but they sounded nice. Virtually everything about this was executed perfectly. Well done.
V/ Split
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