When Ingrid stood him up at a restaurant, he thought he felt his face erupt
When Chun Li did the same, he kicked himself & bought some Asian smut
"The Glass City's splendid enough, in a place where the plaintiffs strut"
might be a cat and mouse game if the emotional range is rough
Reindeer tusks hang over a fireplace; pangs of lust, outside it's raining gusts
Southside, it's mainly drugs - the alpines are gray and brusque
His singular view of the Appalachians and plainspeak thrush
Here was the story of a lonely suburbanite who can't be touched
that part really stood out for me...
great vocab/imagery with lucrative schemes and meta's that kept the whole read enjoyable and enthralling. good mix of emotion and overall just a really well written piece for a topic that imo doesn't have a whole lot to build from. personally felt that you could have ended it on a different note but all in all good read.
lexicon, all in all you had a good structure/idea and outline to have a potentially awesome piece, but it seems like the time crunch, and lack of planning the verse out kind of made the piece suffer.
all in all i have vulgar catching the dub.
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