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Old 10-24-2013, 09:56 PM   #8
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I like this battle. The verses were in the same vein, but still felt like two completely diff angles.

Geno- This was an above-decent verse. Great start, I was caught up in the body, and the ending rounded out well. I honestly can appreciate pieces with that personal touch. It adds to the overall air of the work, as well as giving it an almost tangible feeling. I liked it a lot.

However, deeper description would have grabbed me more. And the perspective also has a large impact on the impression the reader may have on the piece. It felt like a passive agressive way to write an autobiography. Maybe that's just me.

Split- This was a more than solid piece as well. I liked the perspective and how personal it felt. I felt a more vivid picture was painted, and I could literally see things as I read it. That was pretty cool for me tbh. Some language usage eluded me, but for the most part, it was a solid grasp.

Very descriptive, though the focus seemed a little erratic in one spot.

Overall, great battle. Both of you showed up and put effort into your pieces. Geno's felt more naturally written, while Split's felt like it conveyed a more complete message and picture. I liked both a lot, but i'll go with which left me with a lasting impression. MVGT Split.
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