[Mr. J]

This was an interesting battle, Breathless is becoming quite the writer
and I find it great that he is putting so much effort into his work
Pancake is a man of many words and few comparisons...quite the writer
both came correct with an interesting topic to tackle

breathless, I enjoyed the verse you had due to your approach
one I may have taken myself if I was sure what I was going to work with
the ideas are quite interesting with the theme you chose
the metaphorical approach is often a great one especially with topicals
you achieved quite the feat in the time it took to drop this
it was a great approach

Pancake, I enjoyed your piece as well, a great avenue to take
the topic you wrote out was quite interesting due to the build up
you brought me back to the golden era of Hip Hop with the plot
to me "tagging" feels like a long forgotten art form, one often abused as well
and the approach was quite the task due to the flow and storyline
you always have a keen way of sorting out your story and it's great
you didn't seem to let up and your second portion was the cream to the coffee
very well done my good sir...

my vote usually boils down to enjoyability at the end of the battle
and both have seemed to entertain as well as keeping my attention
both verrrry different writers clashing for another W added to their record
one up & comer, the other a well seasoned writer in his own right...
I feel even though breathless had quite the verse that it had its faults
it didn't seem thoroughly laced or weaved together enough to stick
you had the time, but most choose to let their first draft work as their final
you could have, should have put a better attachment to your meta's
it would have done you good in the end....see what I did there...

v/Pancake