Coup's definitely read off more like a poem than anything, but it was elegant and well written. What's beautiful is blind line was dope, but i was slightly peeved that you used the word beautiful twice in such a short verse with the bleaching your corneas into a beautiful oblivion line, which was also solid, but they're both similar
Pancake, your rhyme scheme was more complex and interesting to read, but also more difficult to follow along with in a text verse. I feel like you had a much more realistic approach to the topic. I feel like you could've closed out your piece a lot better
Overall, I feel like Pancake had more quotable lines throughout his verse. The prometheus line, seamstress, rose in the limestone. It was slightly less structured and it definitely could've used a better closing, but it was far more memorable at the end of the read, and if i was going to pick one to read again, it'd be this one
Vote - Pancake
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