I really enjoyed this, it was short but there was a lot of detail in it and you said a lot of pretty interesting things. The flow was dope, didn't have any problem with that at all, and I don't particularly think any part of the piece was sacrificed for this...the rhyming was great, and the imagery and emotion seemed both effortless and real, I could feel what you wanted the reader to feel and I understood everything clearly. I agree with being more diverse with your word choices but honestly I don't think it is a huge problem, just something that needs a bit of polishing. You have the basics down and much more, a dope writer and a dope piece.
It was a pleasure to read, really enjoyed it...keep writing man, props.
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