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Old 02-18-2013, 02:22 AM   #5
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It's like you focused on the rhyme schemes etc but in some parts didn't have strong enough multiple rhymes to pull it off. E.g., bitter again - miscreant phase- nothing remains. The "nothing" is out of place. But other parts were much better. E.g., songs from Boston - long forgotten. There's also something else interesting about the rhymes here. Many of them end with AYES. In a way it's easy because you can rhyme a lot with AYES but it also can become repetitive. Content was good but slightly surface deep couldn't understand the overall focus or direction. Other than the mainly good rhyme schemes which were enjoyable.
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