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Old 10-21-2013, 12:49 AM   #18
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Damn this was dope as fuck lol after reading Adonis verse I knew it would be hard to beat. You constructed an awesome verse man flow was on point an the storyline well crafted. You hit me on a personal level cuz my ex had a miscarriage an I know the feeling of losing a child you never saw. The segments helped the story progress with the time line. So good work with the development overall.
Clutter you came with it man, the short lines worked in your favor with the scheme you used an really brought a new meaning to concrete ideas. Against most other verses you woulda won easily but since you an Adonis were dead even in the technical aspects his personalization of the topic tipped the scale slightly in his favor. Good battle guys but I gotta vote for adonis
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