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Old 10-20-2013, 11:10 PM   #13
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This was definitely a clash of styles lol Zen you used near perfect flow to tell a story and came through with a fresh concept and good execution. A strong drop my dude, I just wish it was longer to flesh out the characters more.
RA, I loved the story bro definitely a unique take on an old tale. Although the flow REALLY hindered me an made it hard to concentrate on the story an rhyme scheme at the same time you still used alot of originality that I could appreciate.
overall tho I gotta vote for Zen because it was written strongly an did lack too much in any certain department like I felt RA did. Good battle guys
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