Zen- this was the tightest execution I've seen from you in this tourney thus far. There was strong rhyme emphasis and a more maturely written format in terms of how you conveyed your topic. The beginning and middle were pretty tightly woven, but by the end seemed slightly abrupt. Additionally, it felt like there were more things to explain here. Overall, really good piece.
Ra- Damn. This was your finest week so far. Very well mapped out, explained, and schemed. Flawless delivery and deep story choice. This drop was very well laid out and thought provoking at points. Good job.
I'm happy I managed to scrounge up the attention span to vote this week, as you two really upped the ante against each other. You obviously understand that there's more at stake, given that its obvious you two are certified contenders now. Great job to both of you for the effort.
In this battle you both chose story, seemingly war over religion. Zen, you managed to tell the story well technically, but seemed to a need a little more backstory details. Ra, you had a more complete and detailed story, and hour own spin on how to relate to what you wrote, gbus making it a more enjoyable read. MVGT King Ra
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