split
Dressed to the nines, headliner- violin recital,
Moonlight Sonata, c-minor sudden and unbridled
That was the highlight of your verse imo. really stirred me.
Other than that, cool portrayal. Verse came off a little snobby. almost like you had a white wig while you wrote it. cool character. flow was pretty poetic. different. keep at it, hone that skipping. cause it's not really running. it's soft - like skippin' - maybe that bitches skin was soft it had you trippin i dunno
Malachi
yo I read that his your first attempt at topicals and I gotta say this was aight man. You gave her a name, said you beat her wood cause she wouldn't beatya wood roflmao yo this shit had character. Keep throwing yourself into the character and write whatever, there is no right or wrong answer. build whole worlds around your words. keep at it. try and win a oscar when you write these topicals.
overall
vote goes to split
very close but just edged it.
good battle.
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