I don't know what happened here but clearly a one-sided match up.
Just Write, very interesting story. I didn't catch the Jack/Jill theme til the end of the piece so you did a good job of disguising that. The concept overall was very good. The only thing I can really say on the negative side of things, the beginning started slow but it picked up and also there were some parts that came off bland. The storytelling could have been great but it was good enough. I believe the concept you used really outshines everything else. This is my first time reading a piece of yours this season if I'm correct and word is you're a force to be reckoned with now. I'd have to see more, but I feel this piece could have been much better storytelling wise with the concept you used, but it's good overall and the ending pretty much sealed the deal for me.
Objective, I don't know what happened, but as Zen mentioned, you probably were pressed for time or just couldn't really think of a concept to put together for the topic because you indeed dropped a very, very basic piece, and I know you are capable of better. If you wrote this a bit more intricately, with some creativity, I would say you could have put yourself in a better position to contend here, but this simple of a piece won't really do much for you in this league that is very deep and you are much better than what is shown here.
Not really much to say here. Just Write gets a fairly easy vote from what could have been a much better overall match up, if Objective put together a more complete work. JW put together a good story under a solid, creative concept and gets my nod easy.
MVGT: Just Write. Good job by both competitors.
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