Adonis- This verse held weight with me because of a past experience in my life when a bitch had an abortion without me even knowing she was pregnant. I know it's fucked up. But your writing here was a excellent as well. You are honestly one of the people I wished I could write like. Each word is placed perfectly, nothing is forced or awkward and I've never read anything I hated from you. Very good this week.
Clutter- I thought that the take on the topic was dope. Take an idea and make it "concrete" which is a very interesting and unsuspected take on the topic, but the way it was presented wasn't very interesting to me. Don't get me wrong, the writing itself was flawless. There were virtually no mistakes, but it was just lacking something in my opinion. What was it lacking? Idk, but it was lacking something lol.
v/Adonis
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