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Old 10-19-2013, 06:02 PM   #9
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YDK- This was a very, very nice piece of work. I'll start off with the mechanics and then give a breakdown on how I interpreted it. Your word usage was impressive especially the contradictions line which is an excellent example of perfect alliteration, but then a few lines later you use bull steeze which the others pointed out as being a negative as well. It brought a little humor to me but it took away the seriousness I felt this piece brought. Now I interpreted this as a stoner (pocket full of sunshine is slang for weed) and you are stoned out at night staring at the stones, i.e. typical stoner lol. I might be wrong but that's what I took from it. Good drop though man.

Mike Wrecka- LOL. I had a feeling after they went to Georgia it was gonna be about Mario. Princess Peach, very creative there. Also tying this topic into the topic with That's Amore is again very creative. That shit would have never crossed my mind so you win the creative side of this battle. As far as the mechanics of this went, I can't remember anywhere where there was a major fault really. Pretty solid drop and I enjoyed this shit. Well done.

This battle is actually very hard to vote on tbh, but I've got YDK with the upset in a very, very, very, very close battle.
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