first off, i wish all the topics were as dope as this one... idk i loved the picture, wish i knew the story behind it.
Genocide.
Quote:
Only science exists, cause everything is dying or dead
Found a few resources, i macgyvered the rest
Apply and connect, what looks like broken violin necks
And try to invent, with things that show the signs of neglect
The worlds been torn down time and again, I am what's left
And I will die to find heaven, that's the promise of death
I'm dressed like an angel that fell, picture perfect painting of hell
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thougth what i bolded was perfect lyrically. the story was cool to me cause you characterized the dude on a lot of different levels, from the world he lived in and how it reflected him, his desire to live and succeed essentially creating his acceptance of death.
Orc fry rice.
Quote:
heart burning like the fire and logs, pockets of wire and cogs
an audible sigh crosses the night; tinkering with desire is odd..
long after this proprietors gone, the night trickles on scribing the same
hiding it's pain, the story of night is neither gory nor light
- it's silence and rain..
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imagery was spot on and is your strong suit. the metaphors were way to heavy for me. like you were focused on describing him completely in a way that reflected the image, and that separated me from what you were actually saying. too poetic in some ways, too limited by a very tight technical rhyme scheme
my vote goes to
Genocide. both showed they will do well this season. Genocide's verse was one of the best I've read by him, in terms of league matches.