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Old 10-18-2013, 06:35 PM   #6
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Contradicting contradictions suppressing suspicions,
I imagine me loving you, then i cancel the visions.
Acting unruly as a matter of fact you can sue me
For bending backwards for bastards that can't handle me moody.
I don't try to be cool see, people push an they pull me,
In so many different directions that I just ignore all the bull steeze


i liked the up until you said bull steeze, that just sounded very elementary to me. the rest of the piece was good but just seemed more on the simple side and it got kind of boring after awhile.



so he trained until he could break bricks with his hands,
and practiced parkour traversing dangerous lands,
playing capture the flag, it really started to add up,
he got a lot bigger, and actually began to feel tough,
but this attention to getting stronger, left the girl abandoned,


MW,
i am one of the biggest mario kart fans out there, really enjoyed this and how you modernized it into your own. enjoyed every bit of it.



both pieces were good, one was better. mvgt=MW
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