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Old 02-17-2013, 01:11 PM   #13
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Orc is back at it topically. Not disappointed with your piece at all. Doesn't read as smooth as your flex/battle verses though, which I'm kind of surprised because you excel with rhyming/flow. Some of your lines were a bit drawn out as well, but aside from those nicks, you told a pretty good story. I believe you should have incorporated more from the picture though. Your story was really good. The mid to the end was very entertaining. Genocide, you took more of a conceptual approach, but you did an excellent job with the imagery & taking the picture, using it to it's full potential. As usual your mechanics are top-notch. Usually, a great story can trump the conceptual pieces, but the way you wrote your piece did enough to take this. If Orc did more with the picture, he'd have gotten my vote. Great job to both.

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