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Old 10-17-2013, 07:36 PM   #9
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This was interesting, I really like the title first and foremost
either way this was an all over the place sort of piece
I see you really exercising your writing process though
you seem like the only one to go back and forth with me in the Cypher
and I thank you for that, this piece had a few dope lines
I feel like if you broke it up a bit and made the structure easy on the eyes
it would get a few feathers riled up...even your own...nice drop
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