Bags
bags did his thing. bags also had some dope rhymes, achievable mission threat was sick. it was also cool how it was legit... not some fairy tale ass shit or had some retardo plot twist at the end. But, the bit after the chunker's inner demons didnt fit right. it was like you/ main character jumped straight into some long-winded back and forth about the meaning of life.. it felt like you didnt know where to go after that fat bitch missed floor 10, and you just started preaching.
it had its moments, but landed some weird spot between gangsta rap, comedy piece, and Namix-parable-on-why-you-are-dumb-and-he-is-smart. structure was more questionable than the Skittles and drank holder on Aero's Cannondale, and kinda made it more obvious how you didnt know where the fuck your next rhyme was gonna end up. chorus was ghey. cool lines mixed in, and had some funny moments. Okay use of topic but seemed kinda forced. notbad
Cashmoola.
decent verse all-around. you wrote about a bitch who took advantage of some dude. it was cool, had some quotables but not as many as Bags. it was kinda made to be a plot heavy verse, but the plot was the only thing that wasnt up to scratch.. twist was wicked dumb because you couldnt have seen it coming or anything, that bitch just killed that dude. boom. story over. the only take-away is a mix of, don't be a cool dude, and that girl was a bitch. Also, it was a mad superficial take on the topic.
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