This was the best thing I've read by you. At first, the -attion rhymes threw me off because it's so simple. Then they kept coming. Then they kept coming more. I agree with whoever said the end was a little weaker. But I think that's the product of changing the rhyme after such a long run with one.
I liked how you stayed on topic, too. That made it difficult to turn this into a collaboration. I'm not as interesting a person as you. Maybe I could have written about you? That seems weird.
Nice work.
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