Tough battle here ladies, real close, I felt like symetrik had the better storyline and take to the topic, he had little things to his verse that helped convey the "soil" throughout that others havent mentioned in their votes, only subtle things like:
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tired of the filth, the stench of moldy
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All alluding to the topic at hand, maybe not directly, but they were definately there and he did enough of it for me to notice what he was doing. I was surprised more didn't note that fact. It was real subtle, but noticeable. Good touch.
Breathless - Reminds me of ole me throughout the first few couplets, heavy on the schemes, good multi-strings used, and the flow is made all the better for it. The "title" if you can call it that is dope, and even though the two of your approaches was similar in one context, I do feel like you edged it in creativity and the mechanics of the verse. It was close, don't get me wrong, the votes display that, but Breathless did enough for the win here this week IMHO.