This shit's two pages long? Wtf?
I'm not gonna give a bar by bar breakdown but I will break it down somewhat.
Gamble- You had a few good ideas but your wording and set ups to the punch killed it. The lines were waaaaay too stretched leading up to the punchline that it took away any effect it might have given it. It kinda reminded me of an ihh type battle verse that wasn't good.
Death- I've never read any battles from you before but since you call yourself the god I'll assume you can do better than this. It seemed like you hardly tried really, or maybe you did. Idk. The strong point of your verse was the weak point of Gamble's. Your wording led to your punches connecting effectively. Even if they were weak punches they still connected.
V/Death
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