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Originally Posted by Improvise
Talkin bout u don't like Pussies.. Witty already proved ur a scared bitch.
I bet this faggot wears pink so much you'd think he was supporting the month of breast cancer awareness.
this was ok but for an opener it lacked that impact from the gate. concept was cool tho
I figured I'd put u on blast.. An beat u till ur full of bad burgundy bruises.
I'd say Death is a gateway to the acceptance of God... But that was b4 the tag tourney conclusion.
bruises and conclusion ok for enders...they sound s bit off when I read it..also acceptance just clunks this whole thing up
Get brushed by the devil's wrath, from u b more like a choppy approach.
The real reason women fear for their lives is cuz they've already witnessed The Kiss Of Death.. yea sloppy & gross.
I don't think death is sex so I don't see the sloppy and gross image..in the bold...that was just worded awfully awkwardly, fucked the flow up g
Brought up some other NCGs and this faggot got more scared.
Got choked up when Aer was surfacing... It b like this herb was a victim of bio chemical warfare.
im mad at this bar..all you did was connect air/aer to choking but you revealed that in the very next 2 words..that whole chemical shit wasn't needed
No1 on this site can stand ur verses.. Face it ur a nauseous wreck.
Here let me break it down for u.... NC BOARD: to Death... "When u drop were fucking bored to death".
its to easy to use death so much..here you use it twice...its a bit corny g
Buffy couldn't convince him to Raise The Stakes... simple fact that he must die.
Ud think... with all the Swayze makes... That's when u know for sure.. he's just Acting A Tough Guy.
even tho this bar has no relevancy to anything now..this was actually a dope bar..great wordplay bro
with all ur pathetic topics no one ever bothers.. Maybe we could bond on blondes.
Shit I haven't seen someone Go Off From A Post so hard since Hardy did the Swanton Bomb.
no problem with this...wasn't feeling the wrestling reference
So I granted this Pinkslip. But remember this first.. u set all the terms.
So I guess u could say... Having a Death Wish is the WAY TO GO!.... yeah & NEVER return.
this backfired on you bro...horribly I mean you say it in the set up...YOU accepted the match YOU obliged his terms....so arent you the one with the death wish? so ironically you say never return to him but really saying it to you tho...concept was jacked mang
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that Swayze line was ill...your problem is you got to much going on in this shit..to many ideas man..you gotta level that shit out holmes get in there and really flesh out some concept that concept...that aer line would of worked if you would of just worked on it a bit more...
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Ya girl never faithful, fuck her when she down? gladly
I’ll eat ya pum’kin pie while she feed u stories w/ more holes than bags avi
tthis was a bit of some awkward wording for me..didn't flow to well but still a decent concept.
he not creative, “$ho Money” still living in 1999 is what my guess is
cause Gamble’s so “Authen!k”, his aliases have !’s for I’s and dollar signs for S’s
this had a bit of humor that was cool..dug the punch thought it had some creativity to it.
IM BETTER THAN U & capitalized on that, so I have to brag n boast
I’ll pretend u are good at swag n flow if u pretend that’s what u don’t lack the most
lol this was nice
From NY but u not in the top MCs out of there & can’t argue
Them dudes living life in the fast lane, while u couldn’t be in HOV lane if u carpooled
I liked the punch..wasn't to fond of the set up..dunno doesn't really pop for me as much as the punch..this could of been dope.
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Originally Posted by Shogun Dinero View Post
... Ima live on this bitches failure... This hate I'm takin over limits.
But a great respect.. Cuz everyone know that when u facing Death that's when ur mostly living.
Don’t say my name again u weak faggot, ARE YOU OUT YOUR MIND?
You’ll be remembered as an ill nika…. once he got Alzheimers and forgot how to rhyme
this was dope lol and hilarious
Live it up in suburbia too kid, his ass still a clown
Son’s such a pussy, he living with an NY state of mind on the outskirts of town
dude you used a pussy line tho? lol outskirts was a nice touch tho..decent bar
wanna fight bags one day then kiss his ass, c'mon bro
ya split personality got u tryna be Shogun while ya reach more than Jon Jones
ha!..this was dope aswell..nice metaphor and references..good way to end
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felt like you had some cool lines here and there but a lot of filler as well..prolly not your best work..but you did enough to showcase the skill...
overall..
I got death taking this....I honestly thought it was closer than everybody says..gamble showed but prolly cuz death didn't take this to serious..it wasn't one sided though...death just won.