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Old 10-14-2013, 12:58 PM   #2
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I realized I missed a vote for week three here is my final vote.

http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=23376

Frank (1-1) vs. YDK (1-1)

I thought both writers connected with the subject well.

YDK - This was my favorite part, I really liked the word play in this part, it fit the subject very well. I believe you did a great job of describing what gambling is really about and how it can destroy peoples lives if they let it.

"I've caused many men to perish hidden distant in time,
I gave you faith when others suffered; so I tripled your dime.
Crippled by selfishness i'll drive a spade through your heart,
With the promise of diamonds that I gave from the start.
You couldn't count the amount of blood I'm responsible for shedding,
But I never lifted a finger yet i lingered amongst the betting."


Frank - This was my favorite part, again I liked the wordplay used on the subject. You also did well at connecting with the scene by describing the nature of gambling. I liked that you added some detail about the game as well.

"''I aint convinced I’m a convict..
In conflict with the grimiest cons on the continent..."
consequence in each contest
He said "I got five maybe six and a poss, shiit.. lets just say 6 books
Oh and Frank.. I needa copy of your 6th book""

This was hard to decide because both pieces seemed to be on point in my opinion. Although I would say I liked the way YDKs poem flowed, it just seemed a little smoother to me.

V- YDK

breathless (0-1) vs. Innovator (0-2)
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=23379

NYCSPITZ (1-1) vs. Zenland (1-1)
http://netcees.co/showthread.php?t=23375
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