fellas - this was a cool flex here... couple pretty slick concepts to go with well structured flow.
Malachi - I was pleasantly surprised with your verse man, i havent seen a HOF play before, that was a real refreshing concept - i normally cant stand when people break-up wordplay "hassle for the HOF", but it was a refreshing concept nonetheless --- you could have made it real dope by using your setup to potentially better bring the actor into context and/or even to bring the idea that your "David" reference was tied to llama --- that would have been ill too.
Also - here's a cool trick if you have to break apart wordplay like that --- use a word that makes sense in both cases --- like your "this drop will END with the HOF, no Hassle"..... so you essentially are just saying part of his name, the end of his name, with NO hassle. AND it make's it like you aren't hassling for it, but you are naturally just going to be there. See what I mean? (i'm only breaking it down to this level because i liked where you were going with it brotha).
Also like your random flex lines which were reinforced by the solid flow... like the God/plankton line - it wasn't anything fancy, but cool for a flex.
Sharp -
I thought you had a cool complementary read here. you could tell it was a quick flow, which is cool - just exercising the creative mind man, i get it. solid flow, and pretty good rhyming concepts. nothing like jaw dropping, but i dont think this was meant to be your mona lisa here anywhere, it was just a cool quick swag/flow drop.
there were a couple instances where you were really on to something that could have been expounded on to be super slick IMAGERY wise... I feel that shit man, it's a lost art for the most part these days - i dont see a ton of it it. If you work on your 'conceptual flow' to create the right context man -- concepts like 'etched in fluorescence/presence of heaven' would come out looking and sounding straight genius -- you just need to build the conceptual flow in and around it a bit more to really bring that shit to light and to life.... BUT again, i get it was just a quick flex, and for that, it was a solid quick read man.
good shit fellas, pleasantly surprised too for the quick flex read i knew it was going to be!
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