Breathless- Damn. I liked the potency of the content once it started to round out. Above par rhyming and syllabic prowess throughout, almost no complaints in that department. I really dug how personal this felt. IMO, personal angles come off more genuine and aggressively portrayed. For the most part, this was no different. Solid piece.
Inno- Great descriptive display and decent word choices. Those were definitely the stronger points. Abstract ideas came into play and elaborated well on the topic. There seemed to be several angles at work here, where depending on the section, it had a separate feel and idea to me. I'm not sure if that's bad or good tbh. Overall, interesting work, and its a bit of a deviation from the storytelling trends these portraits tend to inspire.
I feel as though both you guys would win under different criteria. But seeing as how this would be an overall vote, I'll go with my gut on this technically and story-wise, verses the more abstract descriptive lane. MVGT Breathless. Good job to both of you guys.
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