Nice story telling from both here. Patrown I thought did I great job with imagery and back story, flow was good also. Not much left for imagination cuz it was a piece that didn't ever really climax. It was just a steady line instead of a piece that peaks. In general tho you did well writing and using the picture. Good shit man.
Certain I thought you had a really smooth flow and halfway origion story an take on it but for me it was a bit of a reach to how it correlated with the picture. Just because there's females n a male doesn't mean the story represents the picture fully.your verse was really strong overall but this is a topical battle an I felt patrown used the topic a bit better.
Vote. Patrown
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