mr j- well, this wrapped up .. very demented. enjoyed it though. you made some good points. favorite lines..
Now my art is deprived of the life that progressed it
take our pride and bottle it. sell it back dried of sponsorship
filling it with lies until we realize its bottomless
throughout, the word usage was effective. but the brevity of each sentence hurt a little bit. i think you could have developed the ideas you had more thoroughly for a more engaging read, easily. the pains of a great musician, and disdain of the haves. very good piece, all in all.
vividlyvague - well, you definitely told a whole story. i was lost in it at times. and in the end, had quite a few questions. i think that's how you intend to be received, if your name has any meaning at all. when the cops bust in and he's facing the window he jumps out of and escapes.. that shit is just like a movie. excellent story telling.. good scene set ups. really like how you roll. it was a bit much, to have so many questions still. but i enjoyed it.
/v vividlyvague - i just enjoyed his read more. there was more to chew on.
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