Pat, you took the relating a picture to a story to a whole nother level, subtle too, didn't notice it til halfway through, rereading made it better. There were a couple odd spots where you displacex the end rhyme, but,you did it right, real nice
Certain, I'm not sure what the relation to the picture was aside from titties... But, you did a superb job on the story style, until the end. The conclusion was somewhat lacking though, it was like someone ripped out the last chapter of a good book.
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