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Inno · 10-13-2013, 02:25 PM

Zen.

godam your stlye is your own lol... idont see anyone writing like you do
you bring such weird angles and perspectives to every topic each week.
really showcases your versatility and writing skill...on to the this piece tho
ok so..i like the style you brought..i even like the structure you brought..obv
it plays to your writing and was a smart move to use on your part...really set
that mood you was going for..or atleast the mood im looking at lol...good rhyming
great progression from line to line...I mean this was dam near flawless...but how
does it relate to the picture?

NYC

a more poetic..layed back not so scatteterd brain type of piece...almost straight forward
with that poetic style..very cool imagery aswell..your words through out this entire piece
where vivid and really played to the imagery of the picture...you told a story with the details
of the picture..its almostl ike you took the colors and wrote to that..the lines drawn.the shading..everything about the pic was used...great stuff man...though a little more detail
or I guess more content would of been lovely..

overall..

this was a tough one...Zen came with originality and creativity while NYC came with a poetic abstract yet literall story...dam. I guess I should start off with some flaws like zen you had a lot of typos(I know coming from me its hilarious) that I usually don't notice..but I noticed them so I had to point them out..in some cases it hurt your story..in other not so much...NYC you could put a bit more effort into this..its almost like you half assed it to not no show..which is cool..all it shows is what you are capable of..at that's what want to see...so this came down to preference and who played off the picture more..and its obvious NYC did...I mean in his first 2 lines he refers to the picture..while zen..I gotta be honest man I don't see the picture anywhere in this piece..standing alone this was some fucknig creative and very original writing...but in this battle I thought NYC did an great job with the topic..

fucking A that's 4 dope ass battles.

10-13-2013, 02:25 PM	#10
Inno Ad mini tator Join Date: Feb 2013 Posts: 10,025 Battle Record: 26-54 Champed - Lime Green Poetry Association - Black August - 1-2 Punch League Rep Power: 85899403	Zen. godam your stlye is your own lol... idont see anyone writing like you do you bring such weird angles and perspectives to every topic each week. really showcases your versatility and writing skill...on to the this piece tho ok so..i like the style you brought..i even like the structure you brought..obv it plays to your writing and was a smart move to use on your part...really set that mood you was going for..or atleast the mood im looking at lol...good rhyming great progression from line to line...I mean this was dam near flawless...but how does it relate to the picture? NYC a more poetic..layed back not so scatteterd brain type of piece...almost straight forward with that poetic style..very cool imagery aswell..your words through out this entire piece where vivid and really played to the imagery of the picture...you told a story with the details of the picture..its almostl ike you took the colors and wrote to that..the lines drawn.the shading..everything about the pic was used...great stuff man...though a little more detail or I guess more content would of been lovely.. overall.. this was a tough one...Zen came with originality and creativity while NYC came with a poetic abstract yet literall story...dam. I guess I should start off with some flaws like zen you had a lot of typos(I know coming from me its hilarious) that I usually don't notice..but I noticed them so I had to point them out..in some cases it hurt your story..in other not so much...NYC you could put a bit more effort into this..its almost like you half assed it to not no show..which is cool..all it shows is what you are capable of..at that's what want to see...so this came down to preference and who played off the picture more..and its obvious NYC did...I mean in his first 2 lines he refers to the picture..while zen..I gotta be honest man I don't see the picture anywhere in this piece..standing alone this was some fucknig creative and very original writing...but in this battle I thought NYC did an great job with the topic.. fucking A that's 4 dope ass battles.