Clutter- After seeing your introduction thread in the Discussion, I gotta be honest I figured you would be terrible. So now two things are clear to me: 1) You are a troll. 2) You are a good writer. Excellent piece here. Talking about the protagonist reminded me of A Clockwork Orange as Alex always refers to himself as your humble narrator...But I'm going off topic. This was a great piece and I was very impressed. Good job.
Scripter- I've enjoyed your past two drops so far in this league, but I'm not feeling this one too much man. That being said, you still deserve a breakdown as it's not as bad as the others are making this seem. You have allot of potential man and as someone else said you've progressed allot. Now I would work on your structuring and scheming a little more. You've got talent and can knock some heads. I believe it.
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